I don't find your writing particularly wordy. Then again, my own style tends markedly towards the florid, so I may not be the person to ask.

But fuck 'em. What kind of world are we trying to create when we take a machete to the wings of other writers? Hemingway wrote like Hemingway. You should write like you.

Half the trouble in the world comes from people trying to be something they're not. The other half comes from self-appointed experts not minding their own goddam business.